- Production companies at the beginning
- Better pacing at the beginning
- No shot variety- of Frazer waking up
- More intercutting - so the audience know right away that it is PTSD
- No Soundtrack
- POV shot of washing the hands
- Motivation of movement
- Need actual titles
- Hold the flashback and forward shots for an extra second each - the audience is too confused - the cutting is too quick
- Frazers reaction to the flashback in the mirror
- Inc a shot of the house not exploded
- Inc a sound that makes Frazer want to look out of the window
- Frazer looks out of the window for 3 seconds too long - more consistency in lengths of shots
- The pacing lacks any consistency
- More high / low / canted / distance - more shot variation
- Maybe needs something at the very beginning
- Needs more engagement of the charecter
Monday, 16 March 2015
Second Rough Cut Of Our Opening & Improvements To Be Made
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