Monday 16 March 2015

Second Rough Cut Of Our Opening & Improvements To Be Made




  • Production companies at the beginning
  • Better pacing at the beginning
  • No shot variety- of Frazer waking up
  • More intercutting - so the audience know right away that it is PTSD 
  • No Soundtrack
  • POV shot of washing the hands
  • Motivation of movement
  • Need actual titles
  • Hold the flashback and forward shots for an extra second each - the audience is too confused - the cutting is too quick
  • Frazers reaction to the flashback in the mirror 
  • Inc a shot of the house not exploded
  • Inc a sound that makes Frazer want to look out of the window
  • Frazer looks out of the window for 3 seconds too long - more consistency in lengths of shots
  • The pacing lacks any consistency 
  • More high / low / canted / distance - more shot variation
  • Maybe needs something at the very beginning  
  • Needs more engagement of the charecter 

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